Mar 17, 2010

I m sinking


You make me weary with all this waiting.
My pulse is at random freaking and fluctuating.
For how long will you shard my emotions and rape me off my believing?

3WW

20 Read and Said:

Greyscale Territory said...

Waiting can be a very breathless experience! You capture that tension!

brok3n said...

aww...waiting sucks without a doubt. Try distracting yourself? =(

ThomG said...

You can certainly feel the tension in this.

Andy Sewina said...

Yeah, very nicely done!

off/of?

Leo said...

quite simply marvellous..! :)

believing/belief?

Americanising Desi said...

Leo, let us just say I am trying to be too cool here :)


my 'believing' capabilities :)

Americanising Desi said...

Any - off :)

anthonynorth said...

Great tension in this. Such situations can get the nerves jangling.

Lilibeth said...

Sharding emotions...it makes for great imagery.

Julie Jordan Scott said...

awww... I feel sad... and that sweet teddy bear... awww..... and how compact are your words.... lovely in their succinct yet fullness.

BlueMist said...

Very well done. :-)

- BlueMist

Angel said...

Nice work.

Stan Ski said...

Good things come to those who wait.

Amity said...

Nice, so nice Desi!

I could feel the tension you have!

Please check mine, too!

Thomma Lyn said...

You do a good job capturing the frustration of waiting.

Dorothy said...

The picture of the teddy bear says it all. Love the prose. Good job.

iamyuva said...

open up to the air
don't let your heart pound
breath all the sound
feel the wind around
let go to the howl
its gonna be peace day ahead

Jay Thurston said...

I am with Andy, I first read the "off" as an "of", though both seem to work. Very tense, well done!

Jack said...

A D,

It is upto a person to sink or pull out of it.

Take care

Tumblewords: said...

I'm not keen on waiting, either!

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