Mar 17, 2010
I m sinking
You make me weary with all this waiting.
My pulse is at random freaking and fluctuating.
For how long will you shard my emotions and rape me off my believing?
3WW
My pulse is at random freaking and fluctuating.
For how long will you shard my emotions and rape me off my believing?
3WW
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Waiting can be a very breathless experience! You capture that tension!
aww...waiting sucks without a doubt. Try distracting yourself? =(
You can certainly feel the tension in this.
Yeah, very nicely done!
off/of?
quite simply marvellous..! :)
believing/belief?
Leo, let us just say I am trying to be too cool here :)
my 'believing' capabilities :)
Any - off :)
Great tension in this. Such situations can get the nerves jangling.
Sharding emotions...it makes for great imagery.
awww... I feel sad... and that sweet teddy bear... awww..... and how compact are your words.... lovely in their succinct yet fullness.
Very well done. :-)
- BlueMist
Nice work.
Good things come to those who wait.
Nice, so nice Desi!
I could feel the tension you have!
Please check mine, too!
You do a good job capturing the frustration of waiting.
The picture of the teddy bear says it all. Love the prose. Good job.
open up to the air
don't let your heart pound
breath all the sound
feel the wind around
let go to the howl
its gonna be peace day ahead
I am with Andy, I first read the "off" as an "of", though both seem to work. Very tense, well done!
A D,
It is upto a person to sink or pull out of it.
Take care
I'm not keen on waiting, either!
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