May 27, 2009

3 Words Only

Dreary in the midst of the chaos within
Embrace me my love let my surrender begin
Timid I will be once your body takes me for a spin

for 3 word wednesday

29 Read and Said:

Pia Savage said...

Great use of all the words

AD said...

thanks Pia :D

Jeeves said...

Wow!!!

AD said...

hey thanks Jeeves :D

ThomG said...

I love the simplicity, but the deep message, too. The last line, brilliant. I mean it.

http://thomg.blogspot.com/2009/05/wednesdays-three-word-wednesday_27.html

anthonynorth said...

So simple yet so deep and meaningful. Excellently done.

Sepiru Chris said...

Dear AD,

I concur wholeheartedly with ThomG.

It is a tender, tentative ending, as even the most ardent lover can be once things shift from mind to body. Ah, the duality of the psyche.

Really nice poem, AD.

Thank you for this.

Tschuess,
Chris

PS I don't think I put you behind the curtain at all, AD. It is, however, a pleasure to make your e-acquaintance.

blisshappens said...

I love the surrender in line 2! -Meg

AD said...

thank you all for the appreciation!

I think I am learning :)

Michelle Johnson said...

Isn't it great when lovemaking can clear our dizzying thoughts and settle our chaos within? Well done. Have a nice day.

AD said...

Michelle thank you for comin in and showerin me with appreciation :D

Pretty Me!! said...

swet :)

Life without Clots said...

ok, next time i am going to use the 3 in separate sentences. Should be a challenge, trying to keep them apart (and different). there are so many ways to do this, and as a beginner, I feed off you (and others).

Tumblewords: said...

Clever and well written - the imagery leaps from the words and stirs the mind (too). :)

eye-in-sty-in said...

nicely written!

Andy Sewina said...

Nice visual use of thr prompt words.

gautami tripathy said...

That ending speaks out. Very good work.

timid embrace forces out dreary thoughts

zouxzoux said...

Simple and to the point. I like it!

MichaelO said...

These three words to the hopeless romantic. Very compelling, Desi!

AD said...

yayyyyy victory :D

Pretty Me,
thank you!!

life without Clots,
:D you should definitely and practice makes perfect!

tumblewords,
awww thanks!

eye in sty in,
:D:D:D

Andy,
ooohhh yay to that

AD said...

gautami,
I appreciate your kind words!

zouxzoux,
Simplicity is a charm, no one can harm.

MichaelO,
ahhhh spot on eh :D

pjd said...

a yearning for passion to still your psyche? interesting. very nicely written!

AD said...

yabba dabba doo :D yayyy! thanks!

Hal Johnson said...

I often feel like a should just skip commenting on poetry. I feel like a caveman trying to grasp the nuance of a fine sculpture. But sheesh, this one got me. Simple AND powerful.

AD said...

Hal that is really a sweet comment! :D
i wear a 100 mega watt smile on my face now!

Tangled up in blue... said...

I'm a lil late reading this..but beautiful! Esp. the last line!

AD said...

awwwwwwwwwwww better late than never :D
thank you :D

Dee Martin said...

whoo hoo! Love the color too :)

AD said...

the color??? :D

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